Needless to say, there was so much on my mind I found it
hard to sleep. The dorms were nice, good beds and enough room for the three
other girls in my room. The common room on the other hand, looked like someone
had had too muck fun picking out furniture. It reminded me forcibly of the 80s.
Everything seemed to be a different shade of yellow. The couches, the carpet,
even the walls were painted a sickly mustard color. The neon pillows decorating
the sofas and chairs had almost given me a headache.
I had used the penlight on Andy's pocketknife to navigate in
the girls' room so I wouldn't wake anyone up. One girl at the far end of the
room was snoring louder then a foghorn adding to my discomfort.
Things had changed so dramatically in the last two days. I
had gone from an average teenager, to someone with potential powers living in a
school full of people just like me.
Interesting. About the writers tip; i use long sentences! Some of my dialogue may be short, but that is how people talk. The longest (Recent) sentence I wrote a a total of 5 commas and 1 semicolon. (Or ; that thing.)
ReplyDeleteNo you're great, I'm just posting stuff in general. It's not targeted at you.
ReplyDeleteWe've been talking about that in English recently, that's all. :)
P.S Do you like my redone blog?
ReplyDeleteHow is it redone? it looks epic though.
ReplyDeleteJust the purple and a little space switch
ReplyDeletepuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurple! This story is so cool! but It could really use an action scene. I'm having a bit of a yawn moment.
ReplyDeleteWe'll get there!
ReplyDeleteit's only chapter 1!